In the WA2, Pukit has given a brief introduction on the nuclear power energy and listed accurate reasons to explain why we should invest for a further development on this field.
In general, this essay is quite convincing and well organized. In the first paragraph, a common phenomenon is illustrated that nuclear power has always been related to danger and panic during these years. By using the phrase, apart from, the author gave out his point that, he would support nuclear power which is also the theme statement. However, i think Pulkit did not directly ansewer the qustion of WA2 but focused more on advocating that nuclear power was benefitial and deserved the investment. This makes the themes sentence fuzzy.
The next two paragraphs are closely related as two strong auguments to support the arthor's view. Examples and statistics were used here which made the arguments more comvincing and accurate. Especially in the third paragraph, the author gave a further discussion on the lead cooled generator which is quite precise.
In the end, a comprehensive conclusion is drawn to help the readers to review the main topic of this essay. Words and expressions used in this essay are quite accurate which impressed me a lot as i myself is weak in this part.
I believe that after some careful polishing, this essay can definately be much better.
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Actually I wanted to start with clearing the misconception that people in todays world have about the nuclear power,so in the beginning I stated how nuclear power is not so devastating as it has always been deemed to be.Thus,I thought giving this kind of beginning would certainly give a good base to my essay.Although,I do have realized that the beginning needs to be cut short and more emphasis needs to be given to the questions imposed.I did polish my essay a bit by eradicating some flaws that were pointed out to me by our tutor and hope that this time the essay turns out well and is appreciated by the tutor.
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